Tuesday, January 17, 2012

Is this a good start for my story?

It's okay but doesn't really grab me. Maybe if it were more graphic with regards to the the terrorising of the city. Perhaps building more tension would help. Is there a type of missing person that is occurring? And that's a long paragraph to start with. Sometimes that can overwhelm a reader. But it sounds like an interesting story.

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